Six Sentence Sunday – 15/1/12

Susie White and the Right Hand ManHere are six more sentences from fairy tale retelling Susie White and the Right Hand Man, from House of Erotica.

Her gorgeous hair was perfectly quaffed, and her attractive features were enhanced by expertly applied makeup. Her outfit looked like something from a fashion magazine. I managed to pull myself together before she saw me standing there, all slack-jawed and stupid-looking. Walking towards her, I’d held out a hand.

“Louise!” I’d said, beaming, “I’m so pleased to finally meet you. Dad’s told me so much about you.”

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13 Responses to "Six Sentence Sunday – 15/1/12"

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  1. Alix

    January 15, 2012 at 10:10 am

    Fantastic work with the description, I was standing there with him. Great six!

  2. Jessica Subject

    January 15, 2012 at 1:02 pm

    Wonderful description of the woman and Susie’s reaction to her! 🙂

  3. Cara Bristol

    January 15, 2012 at 2:30 pm

    Like how you worked the reaction/emotion in into the description.

  4. Lisa Fox

    January 15, 2012 at 2:31 pm

    You’ve done a fantastic job describing her!

  5. K.E. Saxon

    January 15, 2012 at 3:30 pm

    Oh, yeah. Definite trouble brewing here. Love the description of the stepmother seen through Susie’s eyes.

  6. Melissa MacKinnon

    January 15, 2012 at 3:31 pm

    “all slack-jawed and stupid-looking” I know that look! Great visual!

  7. Ginger Simpson

    January 15, 2012 at 6:23 pm

    I’m quite familiar with that look myself…the slack-jawed and stupid one. 🙂 Great six.

  8. Dee Carney

    January 15, 2012 at 8:39 pm

    Fabulous description of them both!

  9. Krystal Wade

    January 15, 2012 at 9:43 pm

    This guy is in so much trouble. 🙂

  10. Jennifer Wilck

    January 15, 2012 at 10:17 pm

    Interesting six. Looking forward to more.

  11. dianne hartsock

    January 16, 2012 at 1:57 am

    Looks like love at first sight! Loved his reaction to her. 🙂

  12. jayel kaye

    January 16, 2012 at 4:33 pm

    loved the description.

  13. Lucy Felthouse

    January 16, 2012 at 5:34 pm

    Thanks for your comments everyone, I’m glad you’re liking the story! 🙂