Six Sentence Sunday – 8/1/12

Susie White and the Right Hand ManHere are six sentences from my newly released fairy tale retelling Susie White and the Right Hand Man, from House of Erotica.

He was happy, therefore so was I. Soon it became more serious and dad wanted me to meet her. I was excited, but nervous.

When the time came and Louise had walked into our house, I’d been in awe. Don’t get me wrong, my mom had been beautiful, but in a natural way, as if she didn’t realise, or care. But Louise clearly did.

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14 Responses to "Six Sentence Sunday – 8/1/12"

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  1. Jessica Subject

    January 8, 2012 at 2:00 pm

    A great six to contrast the two women! 🙂

  2. Liia Ann White

    January 8, 2012 at 3:35 pm

    I loved this story!

  3. Dee Carney

    January 8, 2012 at 3:48 pm

    Great characterization of Louise in a few short sentences.

  4. Meg Maguire

    January 8, 2012 at 5:01 pm

    I thought this was very sweet and genuine, and understated. Nice work!

  5. Zee Monodee

    January 8, 2012 at 5:03 pm

    Love how you give an accurate picture of her so easily in these few words 🙂

  6. Eleri Stone

    January 8, 2012 at 5:23 pm

    Uh-oh step mothers are always bad news in fairytale world.

  7. Ginger Simpson

    January 8, 2012 at 7:46 pm

    Great comparison between the two women. Loved it.

  8. K.E. Saxon

    January 8, 2012 at 8:51 pm

    I’m with the others: Stepmothers are bad news in fairy tales and you’ve done a superlative job of contrasting the mother with the stepmother in very few words. This one’s already in my Kindle! Great six!

  9. Gemma Parkes

    January 8, 2012 at 9:55 pm

    Lovely description Lucy!

  10. dianne hartsock

    January 9, 2012 at 1:27 am

    I wonder where this is leading? He made a good comparison of the women. Wonder if their personalities are different as well. Nice!

  11. Krystal Wade

    January 9, 2012 at 4:15 am

    She’s a groomed woman then. 🙂 Love how you compare the two.

  12. J.C. Martin

    January 9, 2012 at 10:11 am

    What a simple yet effective description and comparison of the two women!

  13. Lucy Felthouse

    January 9, 2012 at 11:36 am

    Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving comments, everyone. It’s much appreciated!

    I’m glad you’re all liking the story… there’s more coming soon 🙂

  14. Alix

    January 10, 2012 at 4:21 am

    Great voice, loved this six.