Hump Day Hook No. 4 #HDH

humpdayhookHi everyone and welcome to Hump Day Hook, which is basically where authors post a paragraph from a WIP or a published work to show it off to the world. This week, I’m sharing another snippet from my erotic story, A Taste of London, following on from last week’s, as so many people wanted to know what happens next.

Clearly remembering where he was, Kristian looked around worriedly. “S-sorry, everyone. I’m going.” He left the room to a few mumbles of “just go, already” and “yeah, yeah”.

Ryan slumped back onto his bed and retrieved his own phone. He looked at the time. Seven-thirty a.m. No fucking wonder he was still so tired. Who the hell was ringing Kristian at this time of the morning?

Shrugging, he logged on to the free WiFi the hostel provided and began checking his emails to pass the time until Kristian got back. Despite the early hour and the pitifully few hours of sleep, he knew he wouldn’t be able to get back to sleep now.

A little while later, Ryan heard the door open. Then, “Ryan.”

Something in the tone of Kristian’s voice snapped Ryan to attention. Frowning, he got up and walked out the door before shutting it carefully behind him. His friend was as white as a sheet, except for the redness around his eyes. Just as he was about to make a snarky comment about a killer hangover, Kristian blurted out, “Mate, I’ve gotta go home. That was my sister on the phone. Dad’s had a heart attack and been rushed to hospital.”

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11 Responses to "Hump Day Hook No. 4 #HDH"

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  1. Jessie Lansdel

    March 6, 2013 at 12:44 pm

    Aww, poor guy. I really like this story and must read in its entirety. Great hook. ????

  2. Gem Sivad

    March 6, 2013 at 3:18 pm

    Lots of tension and emotion in this visual scene. Great hook!

  3. Sandra Sookoo

    March 6, 2013 at 4:17 pm

    Aww, what a powerful hook!

  4. Elin Gregory

    March 6, 2013 at 6:58 pm

    Oh no, what a horrible situation for them. Terrific for readers, though. Nice hook.

  5. Flossie Benton Rogers

    March 6, 2013 at 10:53 pm

    Love the image of his red rimmed eyes. Excellent build up and tension.

  6. Shelley Lieber

    March 6, 2013 at 11:25 pm

    Sad 🙁 …well done!

  7. Mandy Earles

    March 7, 2013 at 1:06 am

    Ugh, way to pull on my heartstrings. I hope his dad is okay 🙁

  8. Alexandra Anthony

    March 7, 2013 at 2:59 am

    A sad, powerful hook!

  9. C.R. Moss

    March 7, 2013 at 4:42 am

    sad. poor guy. good hook! 🙂

  10. Kathleen Grieve

    March 7, 2013 at 11:07 am

    I feel really awful because I’m usually the one to notify family! Hopefully Dad is going to be ok!

  11. Paloma Beck

    March 7, 2013 at 5:13 pm

    Well written sad scene, sometimes that’s a hard thing to capture.